一:开头
句子的开头方式,不要一味地都是主语开头,接着是谓语、宾语,最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首,或用分词做状语等。
〔原文〕We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning.
〔修正〕Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together.
〔原文〕The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news.
〔修正〕Hearing the bad news, the young man couldn’t help crying.
二:经过
2.在整篇文章中,避免只使用一两个句式,要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。
①强调句
〔原文〕I met him in the street yesterday.
〔修正〕It was in the street that I met him yesterday.
It was yesterday that I met him in the street.
②由with或without引导的短语。如:
He sat in a chair with a newspaper in the hand.
③分词短语。如:
Satisfied with the result,He decided to go on with a new experiment.
④倒装句。如:
Only in this way can we achieve our goal.
Never before have I seen such a wonderful film.
Not only should we study in the college, but also learn how to be a decent person.
⑤省略句。如:
If so,victory will be ours.
You can make some changes wherever necessary.
3.通过分句和合句,增强句子的连贯性和表现力。
〔原文〕He stopped us half an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender.
〔修正〕He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender.
〔原文〕We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced.
Some told stories. Some played chess.
〔修正〕After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes and playing chess.注意使用不同长度的句子,要结合使用,不能只用短句或只用长句。
4.学会使用过渡词。如:
①递进: then(然后), besides(还有), furthermore(而且), moreover(此外)等。
②转折: however(然而), but(但是), on the contrary (相反), after all(毕竟)等。
③总结: finally(最后), at last(最后), in brief(总之), in conclusion(最后)等。
④强调: indeed(确实), certainly(一定), surely(确定), above all(尤其)等。
⑤对比: in the same way(同样地), just as(正如), on the one hand…on the other hand(一方面……另一方面……)等。
相似的比较: similarly, in the same manner 相反的比较: on the other hand, conversely, whereas, while, instead, nevertheless, in contrast, on the contrary, compared with …,
5.注意使用词组、习语来代替一些单词,以增加文采。如:
〔原文〕A new railway is being built in my hometown.
〔修正〕A new railway is under construction in my hometown.
6.避免重复使用某一单词或短语。如:
〔原文〕I like reading while my brother likes watching television.
〔修正〕I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television.
I like reading while watching television appeals to my brother.
三、 结尾
1、 All in all, what really matters is, in fact, that……(比如说到和谐社会 All in all, what really matters is, in fact, that we should build our society a harmonious society.)
2、 Therefore, it’s not difficult to draw a conclusion that……
3、 As a result , we should take effective measures to do sth.(我们必须采取一些有效的措施来做些什么)
4、 From what has been discussed above , we may conclude that ……
5、 Obviously(此为过渡短语), we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others