simon的满分雅思范文1
接下来帮大家分析的这篇大作文出自剑桥雅思4，很多同学认为这道题目很难：
Happiness is considered very important in is it difficult to define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?
首先，从题目可以看出，这是一篇非辩论类的关于happiness的作文，大家可能平时练习的比较少，缺乏写作素材，这里就帮大家带来很多来自Simon的Ideas：
· Happiness means different things to different people.
· It can be described as a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment.
· People enjoy spending time with family and friends.
· Hobbies, sports and games can be a source of fun and enjoyment.
· Some people see money as a source of happiness.
· Other people define happiness as something deeper.
· They need to feel that they are doing something useful with their lives.
· Some people get a sense of achievement from their work.
· Others find happiness in bringing up their children.
然后，和以往只有一个题目的大作文相比，这道题包含了两个问题，这种题型被Simon叫做two-part question，同时也给出了这种题型的4段式结构：
Use the following 4-paragraph essay structure for this kind of question:
1. Introduce the topic and give an overall answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclude by summarising both answers
和我们前几期讲的大作文结构相比，主体段由Details变成了Answer questions，结尾再总结一下每个答案即可。开头的Introduction段落Simon建议写两句话，引入主题并做出简要回答。来看一下Simon是怎么写的：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
大家可以看出，Simon一如既往地用了it is … that名型作为开篇第一句，第二句由while引导，前半句回答了第一个问题：很难定义，后半句引出第二个问题的回答：确实有获得快乐的的办法。
为什么快乐很难定义呢?这种抽象的问题让学生很伤脑筋，还是来看Simon是如何回答的吧：
Why is happiness difficult to define?
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways.
Simon给出的原因非常convincing:由于个体差异，对快乐感知程度不同，定义则不同;快乐可以和多种感觉有关，如兴奋或平静。大家可以看到，Simon在做解释的时候，时刻不忘举例子，让回答变得更加具体，有说服力。所以小站老师也建议大家多在举例子方面下功夫。
现在贴出完整范文：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of different ways.
Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic preconditions to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or she does not have a safe place to live and enough food to eat. Our basic survival needs must surely be met before we can lead a pleasant life. Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually found in shared experiences with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content to live in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual freedom and a sense of purpose in life.
In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is particular to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food and company need to be fulfilled before we can experience it.
(292 words, band 9)
最后来做词汇总结：
the majority of:其反义词组the minority of也要记牢
regard of:关于
individual:个体，个性
derive:重点词汇，在阅读中也很常见，常和step from/come from替换
a range of:重点词组，在听力中也极其常见，常和a variety of/a series of替换
总结：从这五篇大作文分析中，大家不仅能够看到传说中的出自雅思前考官之手的满分作文，而且还学习掌握了不少写作技巧，针对不同类型的文章应该怎样组织段落结构，Simon的讲解得非常细致具体，告诉大家每个段落应该写什么内容，甚至应该写几句话，都有明确的建议;此外，大家还能得到很多各种各样作文书上绝对不会有的颠覆性的建议，比如告诉大家不要太过纠结于如何使用高难词汇，因为大家如果用不好反而在native speaker看来是not common甚至是wrong.其实只要大家语法和结构都把握准确，真正决定分数的是你的ideas，而非高难词汇;最后大家还可以充分利用每篇文章后面的词汇总结，背诵高频词汇，并参照词组准确理解其含意，学会地道地表达。
simon的满分雅思范文2
我们来讲一篇大作文，以一些Family Topic的作文为例，重点讲一下什么是文章的Skeleton。
Simon说，the skeleton (or framework or basic structure) of a task 2 essay is:
- the introduction
- topic sentences for main paragraphs
- and the conclusion
就是说，他认为文章的Skeleton(就是文章的框架或基本结构)就是开头介绍、主体段落和结论段落。在写作文之前先写Skeleton我们来看一下Simon写的一个Skeleton：
..........
People have different views about whether parents or schools should bear the responsibility for helping children to become good citizens. In my view, this responsibility should be shared.
On the one hand, parents certainly have a vital role to play in the upbringing of their children.
On the other hand, school teachers may contribute almost as much as parents to the development of a child.
In conclusion, both parents and schools should work together to ensure that young people become polite and productive members of society.
..........
大家可以看出，Simon写的Skeleton已经把这篇作文的信息表达得非常清楚了，惟一缺失的就是主体段落，即第二、三段中的细节。Simon建议大家在写作文之前都把Skeleton写到这种程度。
接下来给大家带来Simon最著名的建议之大作文只要写13句。分布在各个段落中的名子数量如下：
· Introduction: 2 sentences
· First main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Second main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Conclusion: 1 sentence
有的同学可能会担心字数太少，Simon说如果大家看他的作文看多了, you'll see that I usually manage to write 250 words or more in this way. I think it seems a lot less scary if you think that your task is to write just 13 sentences!
雅思考官的满分作文都写250+，所以大家也不必一味追求字数，重点还是在于文章的内容，当然了，13句话也不是绝对的，Simon提醒大家: It is not a 'rule' that you must write 13 sentences. This is just my approach or method.大家写作文的时候要根据自己的情况而定。
接下来以这篇作文为例，大家先自己试着写一下Skeleton，然后和Simon写的做下比较
These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Here's Simon’s sample essay skeleton:
Introduction
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to be a very positive trend.
Main body 1, topic sentence
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our societies.
Main body 2, topic sentence
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments are desirable.
大家的Skeleton是否清晰表达了整篇文章的观点和结构呢?是否发现自己写的文章比以往更加精简了呢?Simon说，For many of the students I've taught, a breakthrough (or big improvement) came when they found the confidence to write in a more 'simple' way. Simon认为，当你不再纠结文章中是否包含passives, conditionals or 'difficult academic words' 的时候，you are free to focus on answering the question and explaining your ideas coherently.你就会将注意力放在如何顺畅地表达你的观点。 It takes confidence to change your approach and to believe that the 'simple' way will work.这会更加自信用更加simple的方式来写作。
小站老师提醒大家，这里说的Simple，绝对不是Easy!要想写出高分文章，还是要在Vocabulary、Grammar、Idea三个方面下苦功!
满分范文：
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinnersin their families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to be a very positive trend.
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our societies. Equal rights movements have made great progress, and it has become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue a career. It has also become socially acceptable for men to stay at home and look after their children. At the same time, the rising cost of living has meant that both marriage partners usually need to work and save money before starting a family. Therefore, when couples have children, they may decide who works and who stays at home depending on the personal preference of each partner, or based on which partner earns the most money.
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress. We should be happy to live in a society in which men and women have equal opportunities, and in which women are not put under pressure to sacrifice their careers. Equally, it seems only fair that men should be free to leave their jobs in order to assume childcare responsibilities if this is what they wish to do. Couples should be left to make their own decisions about which parental role each partner takes, according to their particular circumstances and needs.
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments are desirable.
(274 words, band 9)
Last but not the least,小站的Phoebe老师来帮大家整理一下范文中的重点词汇~
breadwinners:非常有趣的合成词，字面上“挣面包的人”，引申为“养家糊口的人”
equal rights movements:这个词组也经常被用到女性话题的大作文中，“平等权利运动”
qualifications:“资历，资格”，非常高频的单词，它的各种形式都要背牢。
sacrifice their careers:“牺牲事业”。小站老师建议大家单词最好放到词组里背，这样才能知道怎么单词怎么用
assume:这里表示“承担”。另外一个意思在雅思考试中也很常见，“假定”
simon的满分雅思范文3
我们来看一篇以Wild Animal为Topic的大作文。 首先看一下题目：
Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
显然这道题是属于agree or disagree类型的，对于这种题型，第一步就是要确定你是agree, disagree还是partly agree. 就这道题目而言，要么选择保护动物，珍视动物资源，要么选择无需保护动物资源，似乎很难做到partly agree。Simon也建议大家选择“Completely disagree”。
确定观点之后，我们一如既往地，need a 4-paragraph plan.大家先试着写一下自己的plan，写好后来看一下Simon写的：
· Introduce the topic (rights and protection of wild animals), then answer the question (completely disagree)
· First reason why we disagree . our duty to protect animals, their rights and place in the world
· Second reason why we disagree . the resources we should use to protect animals, and why this is not a waste
· Conclusion: repeat / summarise our answer
如果把写作文比作盖房子的话，那Structure就是房梁，房梁搭建好了接下就是最重要的环节，填补Ideas。你能不能为第二段和第三段想到有深度有见解的Ideas将直接决定你的考试分数。所以大家平时要多多练习写作，尽量多的去为想论据，丰富中心思想。
而对于Introduction和Conclusion段落，大家要记住Simon的话：
The introduction and conclusion should be short, quick and direct. If you want a high score, spend your time on the main body.
我们来看一下Simon是如何写首尾段落的：
Introduction (topic + general answer)
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.
Conclusion (paraphrase the answer)
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.
大家可以看出，Simon写得简短直接，干净利落。首段引出Topic直接给出观点，尾段复述观点。文章的重心全部放在Body Paragraph，再次印证了那句“思想境界有多高，分数就有多高”。
满分范文：
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely disagree with this point of view.
In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no place in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage the extinction of any species. Furthermore, there is no compelling reason why we should let animalsdie out. We do not need to exploit or destroy every last square metre of land in order to feed or accommodate the world’s population. There is plenty of room for us to exist side by side with wild animals, and this should be our aim.
I also disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that these habitats are also crucial for human survival. For example, rainforests produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide and stabilise the Earth’s climate. If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing the resulting changes to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By protecting wild animals and their habitats, we maintain the natural balance of all life on Earth.
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect them.
(269 words, band 9)
最后是本文重点词汇总结，很多单词大家都认识，但是却不知道如何使用地更加地道，小站老师再次建议大家通过记词组的形式去背单词，总结如下：
it is pointless to do 做...无意义
it is absurd to do 做...很荒谬
extinction=die out动物类写作、阅读、听力都非常常见的词汇，“灭绝”
compelling reason令人信服的原因，compelling可替换为convincing
feed or accommodate the world’s population通过这个词组掌握feed和accommodate的具体用法
stabilise:stable大家都很熟悉，它的动词形式也应该掌握，”使稳定“
far outweigh:远远超过，注意副词far的使用
simon的满分雅思范文4
我们来分析一篇在观点上partly agree的大作文。以一篇大家经常会遇到的有关Traditional Views的作文为例，题目如下：
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
看到这种问agree还是disagree的题目，大家先不要急于写作，Simon建议大家先来回答以下三个问题并做些笔记：
1. What arguments and examples could you use to agree?
2. What arguments and examples could be used to disagree?
3. Which answer would you find easier: agree, disagree or partly agree?
Plan Your Idea
当同意和不同意都有一样多的论据可以陈述时，那我们在第一段Introduction段落中，就要表明自己对该问题partly agree。然后就要进行Plan Your Idea，即把每段要写的内容列成大概题纲。可能有同学会觉得这样会浪费时间，但Simon认为，如果你不plan your idea的话，很可能写到一半就不知道该写什么好，甚至会写跑题。接下来看一下对于这篇文章Simon是如何plan his idea的：
4-paragraph plan:
1. Introduce the topic of 'traditional ideas and modern life', then partly agree: some ideas are outdated, but others are still helpful
2. Paragraph about ideas which are not so helpful nowadays:
Work - having a career for life is no longer normal
Relationships - 'rules' about who and when to marry are changing
Gender roles - traditional fixed roles of men and women have changed
3. Paragraph about traditional ideas which we shouldn't forget:
Work - work hard, do your best, take pride in your work
Behaviour - politeness, good manners, respect for others
Community - help others, be a good neighbour, look after local area
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise the answer
Structure有多重要?
首先大家可能已经发现，Simon写的大作文基本都是四个段落，小站老师在整理Simon给学生留学做回复时发现这样的问答：
^v^Hi Simon. I used your 4-paragraph structure with short introduction and conclusion, but I only got band . I need a band 7, so should I try a different structure?^v^
Simon：Can you see what is wrong with this question? The student is assuming that essay structure is the secret to a high score. But remember: even a great essay structure is nothing without good content (ideas, vocabulary, correct grammar). If you're stuck on band 6 or , you probably need to improve the content, not the structure.
小站老师认为Simon说得非常对，作文的结构只是骨骼，其内容才是肉肉，观点、词汇、正确的语法方能让作文美观饱满。
Introduction段落的写法
然后，我们看一下对于partly agree的作文Simon是如何写Introduction段落的：
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still useful and should not be forgotten.
Simon用了It is true that…. While I agree…, I believe that…句型来分别陈述两边观点，这个句型非常灵活好用，建议大家立刻记在小本本上。
主体段落的写法
再来看Simon是如何写一个主体段落的：
In my opinion, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attached great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In our globalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and neighbourliness.
主体段落依然是五句话(topic sentence and 3 points),将上面ideas里面的核心词汇有逻辑地串连起来。
满分范文：
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still useful and should not be forgotten.
On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about life are becoming less relevant for younger people. In the past, for example, people were advised to learn a profession and find a secure job for life, but today’s workers expect much more variety and diversity from their careers. At the same time, the ‘rules’ around relationships are being eroded as young adults make their own choices about who and when to marry. But perhaps the greatest disparity between the generations can be seen in their attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people.
On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attach great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they enter today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics that are perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In our globalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead happier lives if they had a more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and neighbourliness.
In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem unhelpful in today’s world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas as irrelevant.
(299 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
incompatible:中文意为不和谐，容易让学生以为这个词只能用来形容社会，而英文释意two actions, ideas, etc. that areincompatible are not acceptable or possible together because of basic differences,所以建议大家背单词时多看英文释意，有助于准确运用词汇。
relevant:一对反义词，即可表示和...紧密相关，也可以表示有重要价值或意义。反义irrelevant
profession:我们背过很多表示专业的单词，如major,subject,当表达学习一个专业本领去找工作时用profession
disparity:差异，不同，比difference高级多了
globalised world:常用基本表达，需背熟
sense of:表达抽象意义的感觉，如sense of direction方向感，sense of satisfaction满足感
dismiss:大家最熟悉的意思是“解雇”，记住这个短语dismiss...as,英文释意to decide that sb/sth is not important and not worth thinking or talking about
simon的满分雅思范文5
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. Why could this be?
Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
为什么人们更喜欢外国电影?政府应该支持本土电影吗?Simon管这种题目叫“Two-Part Question”，并且建议大家这种文章要写成四段，每段具体内容：
1. Introduction: topic + general answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclusion: paraphrase the answer you gave in the introduction
Simon说，Introduction段可以只写两句，第一句引入主题，第二句表明立场。如：It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making by subsidizing the industry.
第二段和第三段为主体段落，Simon建议大家每段各写五句话，写之前大家可以发散一下思维，简要列出每一句的论据分别写什么。下面是Simon给出的每段的大纲：
First main paragraph: Why could this be?
1. Topic sentence - several reasons
2. First reason - budgets for action, special effects, spectacular locations
3. Example - Hollywood blockbusters like Avatar or James Bond films
4. Second reason - the most famous actors, actresses and directors
5. Final reason - poor quality local filmmaking in many countries
Second main paragraph: Should governments give financial support?
1. Topic sentence - governments should support local film industries
2. Explain why - talented local film-makers need opportunities
3. Explain more - they need money to pay film crews, actors etc.
4. Explain consequences - would lead to employment, income, tourism
5. Example - invent an example about your country!
想好这五点之后，就很容易把这五句话串连成一个段落了，来看看Simon是如何将大纲中的词汇短语转化成一个个完整的句子的：There are several reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly, the established film industries in certain countries have huge budgets for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and their global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they are made by the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.
结论段Simon是这样写的：
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.
我们可以看出：1，结论段是在改述Introduction段; 2，他在结论段中有改两个Part的顺序——先说Financial Support再说外国电影的流行。对于不知道结尾段落该写什么的同学，这两点可以是非常好的借鉴。
满分范文：
It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making by subsidizing the industry.
There are various reasons why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly, the established film industries in certain countries have huge budgets for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and their global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they are made by the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.
In my view, governments should support local film industries financially. In every country, there may be talented amateur film-makers who just need to be given the opportunity to prove themselves. To compete with big-budget productions from overseas, these people need money to pay for film crews, actors and a host of other costs related to producing high-quality films. If governments did help with these costs, they would see an increase in employment in the film industry, income from film sales, and perhaps even a rise in tourist numbers. New Zealand, for example, has seen an increase in tourism related to the 'Lord of the Rings' films, which were partly funded by government subsidies.
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help to raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with the foreign productions that currentlydominate the market.
(294 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
Subsidizing这个词大家眼熟吗?其名词形式Subsidy在剑七Test2的阅读中有出现过，和Allowance做同义替换，意为补贴。
Established的动词形式大家用得比较多，加ed变为形容词，意为既有的。Accomplished同样是v.变adj.，意为精通的，熟练的。大家要学会灵活使用这类形容词。
Blockbuster和Shoot Scenes这些和电影有关的词汇大家要记牢，可以用于口语表达中。
Financially不仅是对题目表达的替换，而且形容词变副词的用法也很灵活。
Dominate 大家背完这个单词不知道怎么用的话就背下来这个短语Dominate the market，“在市场占据主导地位”。
